Typos

[Frumple]

'attacker's', actually. Apostrophe.

Minor other typo in the svn: Line 111 of Vicious Strikes (techniques/thuggery), should read

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return ([[You know how to hit the right places, giving +%d%% critical damage modifier and %d armour penetration.]]):

Modifier is misspelled mofidier in the current file.

[trev]

goddam apostraphees.

Description of Hurricane.

'Each time one of your lightning spell dazes a target it has x -> y % chances to ....'

should be

"Each time one of your lightning spells dazes a target it has x -> y % chance to ...'

[greycat]

http://wooledge.org/~greg/te4.spelling.20110903

A quickie, only covering some stuff I saw in data/talents/spells/.

[bricks]

Svn, Invoke Darkness talent description:

At level 5 none of your Nightfall spells will hurt your minions any more.

sounds better as

At level 5 your Nightfall spells will no longer hurt your minions.

[Zonk]

In the high scores, it says 'killed by a X' rather than 'killed by X' for unique monsters.

[Susramanian]

The comma splice is rampant in ToME, and must be exterminated. Some fixes:

Fatigue tooltip:
Bad: Not all talents are affected, notably Wild Gifts are not.
Good: Not all talents are affected; notably, Wild Gifts are not.

Several things in the Arena unlock chat:

Bad: "Interesting, tell me more about that Arena."
Good: "Interesting. Tell me more about this Arena."

Bad: #LIGHT_GREEN#*The promises of fortune look so convincing coming from such a
suspiciously-dressed man. Something tells you this is not a trap, so you
consider his offer one last time...* [This occurs in multiple places]
Good: Actually, this should just be snipped out. The dialog reads much better without it. I know, I know; it's not a comma splice. But it is confusing and unnecessary and ugly.

Bad: "I am ready for battle, let's go now!" [This occurs in multiple places]
Good: "I am ready for battle. Let's go!"

Bad: "Sounds like fun, let's make haste!"
Acceptable: "Sounds like fun. Let's make haste!" [Note that this is merely "acceptable" instead of "good." That's because, even with the comma splice fixed, it still reads like something out of a bad Japanese translation.
Good: "I'm ready."

Bad: Heheheh, well done, @playerdescriptor.race@! [Spelling out a laugh, especially like this, makes this look like it was just typed in IRC.]
Good: Well done, @playerdescriptor.race@!

Bad: I won't keep you away from your adventures, I was there too, long ago.
Good: I won't keep you away from your adventures; I was there too, long ago.

Bad: Just a minute, I have to prepare my equipment.
Good: Just a minute. I have to prepare my equipment.

[Susramanian]

The arena-unlocking npc in Derth:

Bad: "Hey you, come here you seem worthy.."

Good: "Hey, you. Come here."

[Hedrachi]

The arena-unlocking npc in Derth:

Bad: "Hey you, come here you seem worthy.."

Good: "Hey, you. Come here."

or "Hey, you. You seem worthy... come here."/"Hey you, come here... you seem worthy."

[Avianpilot]

I always found it amusing before the dialog change a few betas ago:

"Hey you, come here you seem worthy.."

(Go and talk to him)

"What do you want? I'm waiting for a great fighter"

[bitterhorn]

This is less of a typo than a grammatical quibble so I apologize if I'm posting in the wrong thread, but...

...the death message on the global channel that says a player "...was disemboweled to death by [mob] on [floor x] of [zone]" always strikes me as very silly. You can't disembowel someone just a little! Disembowelment is pretty much fatal in and of itself, sooner or later.

Therefore, "...was disemboweled by [mob] on [floor x] of [zone]." would be fine just by itself. Or if you want to make it extra-chilling,
"...was disemboweled by [mob] and left to die on [floor x] of [zone]."

[bitterhorn]

Oh, and last night I saw someone who was "decapitated to death" on the channel - same issue as above; I've never heard of anyone being non-fatally decapitated

[velk]

Necromancers:

Undead Explosion -
'Beware not to be caught in the blast!' should probably be 'Beware ! Don't get caught in the blast!'

Surge of Undeath - There's extraneous semicolons after each of the calculated values in the description ( e.g. 'accuracy by 7;' )

Sacrifice -
'Using its bones you' -> 'Using it's bones, you'

Circle of Death -
'Only one bane can affect a creature' -> 'Only one bane can effect a creature'

Fear the Night - not a typo really, but why is this a mental save versus a knockback ( which would seem an inherently physical thing ) ? Would it make more sense to say something like 'make a mental save or flee 4 grids away' given the spell name ?

Curse of the Meek - There's a line break between 'all' and 'hostile' that shouldn't be there.

Frostdusk -
'ignoring x% darkness resistance of your' -> 'ignoring x% of the darkness resistance of your'

Will o' the Wisp -
'Will o' the wisp will take a random target in sight and home on it' -> 'Will o' the wisps will take a random target in sight and home in on it'

Cold Flames -
'Cold Flames slowly spreads from' -> 'Cold Flames slowly spread from'
'The flames deals [x] cold damage' -> 'The flames deal [x] cold damage'

Vampiric Gift - 'Vampiric energies fill you, each time you deal damage you have x% chances to heal' -> 'Vampiric energies fill you; each time you deal damage you have x% chance to heal'

[bricks]

Un-ID'd Frost Treads should either be called "icy boots" or "ice-covered boots," not "icy covered boots."

[Avianpilot]

Sacrifice -
'Using its bones you' -> 'Using it's bones, you'

Actually it is correct as-is. "Its" without the apostrophe is possessive; in this context, it is referring to the bones that the bone giant minion has. "It's" with the apostrophe is a contraction of 'it is', so what you're suggesting would end up changing the meaning of the line to "Using it is bones, you'.

[lukep]

Circle of Death -
'Only one bane can affect a creature' -> 'Only one bane can effect a creature'

Correct as is.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/affect

Affect
–verb (used with object)
1.to act on; produce an effect or change in: Cold weather affected the crops.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/effect

Effect
–noun
1.something that is produced by an agency or cause; result; consequence: Exposure to the sun had the effect of toughening his skin.

A correct usage of effect would be something like:

Only one bane effect can be applied to a creature

Sacrifice -
'Using its bones you' -> 'Using it's bones, you'

As Avianpilot said, it should be "its" instead of "it's", but the comma needed fixing, leaving: 'Using its bones, you'